Dusk_Shard ([info]dusk_shard) wrote,
@ 2008-03-05 00:29:00
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Entry tags:ashe, basch, full cast, valley of the dead

Fic #2: Valley Of The Dead. Part One
Title: Valley Of The Dead. (Part 1/?)
Characters/ Pairings: Basch/ Ashe. Full cast + Vossler.
Rating: T
Length: 539
Notes: In-Game so no spoilers
Summary: An exhausted Basch falls asleep outside Raitwalls Tomb, and is haunted by his worst fears. First Chapter. Basch-centred.


Valley Of The Dead: Part One



With the torturing sun beating down on their backs, the entrance to Raithwalls tomb was like a colossal furnace, intent on driving them insane with it's heat. Basch's skin prickled and he fought to control his rasping breath as beads of sweat trickled down his body.

Vossler slid down the pillar beside him, chest heaving under his armour, hands reaching for the water he carried.

The others thought this an inviting idea. They stumbled towards the teasingly inviting shade of the cliff edge and threw themselves onto mercifully cool sand. Vaan actually groaned and stretched out his arms as if to hug the ground.

Basch’s head swam as he sat down dizzily and his back struck rock. It was high time for a rest. The Sandseas were far enough to cross on foot without the unbearable heat, constant stream of foes to slay and Garuda the undead dragon to welcome them enthusiastically here at the Valley of the Dead.

The poor princess had gone from white to red over the last hour or so and didn't look like she could even lift an arm let alone cast a spell to relieve herself.

In fact, Basch could barely gather the energy to raise his own weary, bruised arm. But lift it he did, and slowly summoned the power to cast Cura as Fran cast a spell Basch didn't’t recognize. A shower of icy droplets cascaded blissfully down upon them for a short moment. Balthier swigged the potion.

A light, swirling wind lifted the hair from his neck, cooling him further. He sighed and let his eyelids close before he could stop himself.

Dimly he registered Balthier’s voice. “Poor man’s worn himself out. Of course, it would help if he slept during the night like everybody else, for a change.”

And exhaustion rolled over him like a smothering cloud on the breeze.

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He struggled at the hands that pinned his own behind his back. Thrashed and snarled in panic and desperation. His efforts wasted, his Armour weighing him down, strength ebbing away from his limbs.

“Captain- our King… What have you done?”

Basch froze.

He knew the words, thought the voice was not amongst those that had haunted his endless night in Nalbina.

He lifted his head sharply. Vaan- eyes wide and disbelieving- snaked to the ground clutching his side.

A growl ripped at his throat, dread pounded his heart as he thrashed against his captors with renewed vigor.

A flash of white hair-

He stilled, staring in horror at his King’s thrown.

Ashe-

Her head rested on her blood-drenched shoulder. Her dead eyes gazed unseeingly at the blue carpet beside him.

An eruption of raw emotion took place in his chest. He could not breath. He could not see.

Ashe- my Queen-

Mist shrouded around her where she sat sprawled, animating her sickeningly. Her eyes suddenly focused, unblinking. Her head turned slowly towards him.

“Basch. My Knight, my Guardian,” she spoke in a far away voice that seemed to come from all around him.

“What have you done? My Captain… my Captain…” she trailed off.

“Basch?” she whispered.


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Notes:
- Thanks for reading :D Next part soon.
- Entries are friends-locked after a few days so you must friend this journal to read past fics.
- Disclaimer: I do not own Final Fantasy XII, it's characters, settings etc. My stories are completely fictional.
-Please comment! Constructive criticism welcome, this is only my second fic ever and I don't write much.


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[info]demonas_rogue
2008-03-05 12:46 am UTC (link)
I'm excited about this. Their isn't enough BASHE fiction if you ask me and I'm hoping this is one of them. If not, I'll still continue as this has me excited.

I love Basch as the protagonist in any story.

He has so much to tell the reader. :D

Good job!

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[info]dusk_shard
2008-03-05 12:50 am UTC (link)
It is the beginning of a Bashe fiction! I think I'll switch narration between Ashe and Basch too :D

I'm excited about this too, I loved this part of the game.

Thanks so much!

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[info]demonas_rogue
2008-03-05 04:23 am UTC (link)
By the way........

Who made the layout to your LJ! It's gorgeous!!!!

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[info]dusk_shard
2008-03-05 12:34 pm UTC (link)
Thankyou! It was made by [info]minty_peach, I rarely use any others because hers are so easy to apply and there are so many good ones to choose from! (I made the header though)

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[info]denglongfist
2008-03-05 04:28 am UTC (link)
That was a nice comparison with the events at Nalbina. Very well done, I'm looking forward for next part.

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[info]dusk_shard
2008-03-05 12:35 pm UTC (link)
Thankyou very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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[info]denglongfist
2008-03-05 10:25 pm UTC (link)
I'm glad you wrote it XD

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[info]aorin107
2008-03-07 10:28 am UTC (link)
An interesting start, very rarely do we see Basch telling the story from his ppint of view. Poor dude, no wonder he doesn't sleep, haunted by nightmares, possibly a dark premonition and his worst fears...

I look forward to reading this fic, and see how it develops, especially the Basch/Ashe moments there is to come ;)

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[info]dusk_shard
2008-03-07 02:37 pm UTC (link)
Thanks! Yeah, Basch has a big part in the beginning of the game and then sort of fades into the group a bit but he deserves to have fics from his point of view ;)

I'm glad! The next chapter is about halfway done ^^ Love your icon btw!

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[info]aorin107
2008-03-15 12:22 pm UTC (link)
Eheh... I alwyas thought that Basch part of the story was rather interesting compared to the rest. Since he changed from Landisern->Loyal Dalmascan Captain->Supposing Kingslayer and Traitor->Ashe's personal bodyguard->Judge Magister. Yeah, he fade into the group, allowing other characters to develop but he has so much to tell... ;D

Ever since this reply, I think you've updated another two chapters, right? I really, really have to catch up with everything, including updating my own stuff X3

And my icon? Well, SE is so stingy on romance, so I have to make the impossible possible in this manner XD I do hope it looks deceiving enough though ;3

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[info]dusk_shard
2008-03-15 12:35 pm UTC (link)
haha he's had quite a life! Gah, I love him ;D

Oh yes, there are two more chapters. I hope their better because my writing was pretty bad in this one lol! I've never been a writer, I express myself through art and icons.. it's completely different. Yay! Your gonna read them XD

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[info]aorin107
2008-03-15 12:47 pm UTC (link)
I wouldn't have completed FFXII that fast if it wasn't for Basch, honestly! XD And why did I buy RW again... oh yea, because Basch is going to have a short cameo, and also, the suspicious conversation that he and Ashe shared ;)

You call that bad, or, you are just being humble 8O I think your story is interesting, very gripping and shows a lot of potential ;) And you update so fast, which means, I won't run out of Basch/Ashe materials to read for a while ;D

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[info]dusk_shard
2008-03-15 01:00 pm UTC (link)
Haha same! Plus the party would have died as soon as they set out if it weren't for Basch XP I always use him as my tank and party leader ^^

Oho, it's bad, though I am known for being overly-himble so even if it was good I'd think it was bad. Saying that I was really excited when I finished this and couldn't wait to get it on the net. Hence the rediculously short chapter.. It just doesn't flow because I wrote it without a plan. Chapter 3 had a plan so hopefully you can see a difference :)

Yay, you make me wanna write more! The next chapters gonna be soooo fun to write!! I just have a few issues with what happens to people when they have a concussion, never having witnessed one myself.. *zips mouth*

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[info]aorin107
2008-03-15 01:23 pm UTC (link)
Basch always gets the best items from me, though generally, I level them equally, but still, Basch is the first to reach another level, because... I'm bias XD

I think sometimes it is better to write without planning. I spend too much time planning my fics (30 chapters, and minimum 3000 words per chap) that somehow it ends up extremely long and feels like such a burden to write =.= Recently, I'm trying to write a story without pre-planning for more than five chapters, and I just hope that it'll work to my favour XP

But that's my method when I'm desperate X3

... Concussion? I hope no one gets hurt too badly ;) I've never seen or had one before (thank god) XP Go, write, write, write more XD

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[info]dusk_shard
2008-03-15 01:34 pm UTC (link)
That's exactly the same for me. And I gave him the prettiest Esper lol I just don't feel safe without Basch in the party! If something big comes along I'm like "where's my Knight??!"

Yeah, I didn't think out Valley Of Dead at all! I just wanted to pick up a pen and warm up my writing skills. By planning I really just meant playing it through in my head before I write it. I'm gonna have to think of a good way to end this little series because the title pretty much limited it to Raithwall's Tomb! You know what? The end just popped into my head. Sorted.

Your right, planning well in advance just makes writing seem like a chore.

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[info]aorin107
2008-03-17 10:20 am UTC (link)
You know what? The end just popped into my head. Sorted.

Never have random discussions with fans. Because I swear everyone in this fandom is a bad influence. I've got tons of things to do, fics to write, videos to make, icons to create, but all goes down the drain when my friend tease me with new ideas!! For shame!! X3

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[info]dusk_shard
2008-03-17 05:10 pm UTC (link)
Very good point. I do love a good random discussion though... ;)

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[info]ladyearisu
2008-03-07 07:29 pm UTC (link)
Hey, I am really liking this! :) I write and read BaschxAshe fics, and in my opinion, there aren't enough stories bout them. Say, ou don't have this story posted on fanfiction.net? It is easier to keep track on there :P

Nonetheless, I'll keep up following this. Great job :)

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[info]dusk_shard
2008-03-07 07:34 pm UTC (link)
Thanks so much! I have just joined fanfiction.net and I did post it there. It had a few hits but no reviews :( hehe, I'm not the best writer but I intend to get better!
I'm nearly finished then next chapter ^^

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